An unforgettable place
Dawood Muhammad/ FirstDraft Ch 4/ Tues 11
A lush green garden located5 kilo meter away from my house attracted me in my childhood.Garden contains variety of fruit trees like, guava,pmmigrats,oranges and lemons etc.At the one corner long trees were standing in the rows,and on the other corner
a small swimming pool was erected to shower.In front of swimming pool was a large field to play the games like volleyball, cricket and hockey etc.In the evening,children and young ones used to flock into the play ground to play different games.
Wearing sports suites and shows ,riding the bicycle to reach play ground to play cricket with my friends was great moments of my childhood.I never forget the faces of my friends who used to play cricket with me.Every one seems busy in the play ground shouting and clapping for others ,creates a up roaring and lot of noise when the cricket match used to start.I remember,it used to instill into me a new spirit of fighting in the match as if I am alone enough among the 12 members of my team to dominate over other team.After winning the match ,celebrating as if we have won the world cup was the daily routine of my childhood.
After match finishes, we get into the garden to pluck the oranges from trees gossiping with friends ,were amazing moments of my life.Sun is near to set in,standing in the rows to wait for our term to plunge in to the swimming pool used to create a thrill and sense of joy in me.Whenever I play my cricket match ,It drifts away my thoughts to my childhood and reminds me the garden and its surroundings.
Returning back to home after the sun setting , used to make me upset and wish to stay more there and not to leave it as if ,it was my home.I still considers that place to my second home, which gave me very valuable moments in my life. Many a times I got accidents while driving the bicycle to go to play match,it happened rather due to my carelessness or passion for cricket.Even now,i can not define the specific reason which caused the accidents.The only thing I know, was the worries on the faces of my parents
after the accidents.They often told me to ride the bicycle with low speed but, i never listened to them and continued to ride as i did before.
It was my wish to stay there for entire my life and to enjoy the moments more there.The nature did not allow me to stay there any more.My father was the civil servant ,got the promotion and was appointed to another city.Our family had to leave that wonder full place which provided me great memories of my life. It caused a great pain and anguish,it was terrible to leave that paradise and friends.After the passage of time, It made me to realize world's suffering.I am lucky,i am still in touch of with those friends who shaped my life in a excellent way and furnished the opportunity to dream.whenever i go to my country,i visit that place in order to recall my memories.It generates enthusiasm to live this life happily and face the challenges of future.I miss that garden and it surroundings a lot!
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From Tae Hwan to Dawoon Muhammad
ReplyDelete1)I liked the fact the writer had very strong emotional connections to the place and the expression of genuine happiness was excellent for example "Sun is near to set in,standing in the rows to wait for our term to plunge in to the swimming pool used to create a thrill and sense of joy in me."
2) I think the writer described the place clearly in terms of what was happening but the garden its self was not clear.
3) No the writer did not appeal to different senses.
4) The mood and the atmosphere of this place was very energetic, happy and innocent.
5) I think the writer chose to write about this place because he felt a very strong nostalgic emotion that he was most passionate about.
6) I think the writer can explain about the garden by showing not telling and by using the 5 senses to explain the atmosphere.